雅思写作真题范文剖析：电子产品损害读写能力?

今天带来的是雅思写作考官范文学习笔记，选自机经真题。本期我们来看看科技类话题

Some people believe that the increasing use of computers and mobile phones for communication has had a negative effect on young people’s reading and writing skills.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

（一些人认为，越来越多地用电脑手机交流会损害年轻人的阅读和写作技能。你多大程度上赞同或者不赞同？）

先来个头脑风暴，have a try~

问题：电子产品对读写能力的影响

你可以给出哪些观点？

看完本期内容，你会有答案~

考官范文

Currently, youngsters has become increasingly dependent on electronic products like computers and smart phones. Some people argue that the overuse of these devices could pose threat to teenagers’ reading and writing abilities. Before giving my opinion, I think it is important to analyse this phenomenon on both sides. On the one hand, the over reliance on computers and mobile phones everyday could undermine youngsters’ reading and writing capacities. Usually, the information and articles exposed online are cluttered with Internet language, which is featured by abbreviations and informal language which could not be used in formal academic settings. Immersed in these fast-food cultures, youngsters have less time to appreciate high quality books. In addition, an important function of these communication tools is to enable people to interact with each other via sound and pictures. Although some people still write text messages, the contents in this context are quite simple. Also, when people write on the phones or computers, they pay less attention to their spellings, as the mistakes can be corrected automatically. This is particularly harmful to teenagers, who need to practice writing by hand and develop writing skills at their early ages. However, on the other hand, for those who know how to take advantage of these electronic products, there might be some positive influences on their academic performance. For example, some university students often use computers to work with their teams on their school projects. During the process, they share and discuss useful reading materials for their essays or proofread their writings. The communication tools in this case can contribute to better their literacy skills. To sum up, the influences of the increasing use of computers and mobile phones are decided by how they are used. Over dependency on them could undermine the pupils’ academic literacy, while appropriate and smart utilisation could contribute to the development of related skills.

接下来，我们来分析范文的结构及观点。

段落一（开头段）

①Currently, youngsters has become increasingly dependent on electronic products like computers and smart phones. ②Some people argue that the overuse of these devices could pose threat to teenagers’ reading and writing abilities. ③Before giving my opinion, I think it is important to analyse this phenomenon on both sides.

【背景信息】①Currently, youngsters has become increasingly dependent on electronic products like computers and smart phones.

参考译文：目前，年轻人越来越依赖电脑和智能手机等电子产品。

【他人观点】②Some people argue that the overuse of these devices could pose threat to teenagers’ reading and writing abilities.

参考译文：有些人认为，过度使用这些设备可能会对青少年的阅读和写作能力构成威胁。

【文章内容】③Before giving my opinion, I think it is important to analyse this phenomenon on both sides.

参考译文：在给出我的观点前，我认为以双种角度分析这一现象是很重要的。

段落二（主体段一）

【消极影响】①On the one hand, the over reliance on computers and mobile phones everyday could undermine youngsters’ reading and writing capacities. ②Usually, the information and articles exposed online are cluttered with Internet language, which is featured by abbreviations and informal language which could not be used in formal academic settings. Immersed in these fast-food cultures, youngsters have less time to appreciate high quality books. ③In addition, an important function of these communication tools is to enable people to interact with each other via sound and pictures. Although some people still write text messages, the contents in this context are quite simple. ④Also, when people write on the phones or computers, they pay less attention to their spellings, as the mistakes can be corrected automatically. This is particularly harmful to teenagers, who need to practice writing by hand and develop writing skills at their early ages.

【论点】①On the one hand, the over reliance on computers and mobile phones everyday could undermine youngsters’ reading and writing capacities.

参考译文：一方面，每天过度依赖电脑和手机可能会损害青少年的阅读和写作能力。

【语料积累】undermine ones capacity损害某人能力，undermine表示逐渐削弱

【论据一】②Usually, the information and articles exposed online are cluttered with Internet language, which is featured by abbreviations and informal language which could not be used in formal academic settings. Immersed in these fast-food cultures, youngsters have less time to appreciate high quality books.

参考译文：通常，在线公开的信息和文章充斥着网络语言，其中以缩略语和非正式语言为特征，不能在正式的学术环境中使用。沉浸在这些快餐文化中，年轻人没有那么多时间阅读高质量的书籍。

【语料积累】be cluttered with充斥着…，clutter作动词表示塞满

【论据二】③In addition, an important function of these communication tools is to enable people to interact with each other via sound and pictures. Although some people still write text messages, the contents in this context are quite simple.

参考译文：此外，这些通信工具的一个重要功能是使人们能够通过声音和图片相互互动。虽然有些人仍然写短信，但文本内容相当简单。

【论据三】④Also, when people write on the phones or computers, they pay less attention to their spellings, as the mistakes can be corrected automatically. This is particularly harmful to teenagers, who need to practice writing by hand and develop writing skills at their early ages.

参考译文：再者，当人们在手机或电脑上打字时，他们对拼写的关注较少，因为错误可以自动纠正。这对青少年特别有害，他们需要用手练习写作，并在早期培养写作技能。

段落三（主体段二）

【积极影响】①However, on the other hand, for those who know how to take advantage of these electronic products, there might be some positive influences on their academic performance. ②For example, some university students often use computers to work with their teams on their school projects. During the process, they share and discuss useful reading materials for their essays or proofread their writings. The communication tools in this case can contribute to better their literacy skills.

【论点】①However, on the other hand, for those who know how to take advantage of these electronic products, there might be some positive influences on their academic performance.

参考译文：然而，另一方面，对于那些知道如何利用这些电子产品的人来说，可能会对他们的学习成绩产生一些积极的影响。

【论据】②For example, some university students often use computers to work with their teams on their school projects. During the process, they share and discuss useful reading materials for their essays or proofread their writings. The communication tools in this case can contribute to better their literacy skills.

参考译文：例如，一些大学生经常使用计算机与他们的团队进行学校的项目。在此过程中，他们为论文或内容校对分享和讨论有用的阅读材料。在这种情况下，交流工具可以有助于提高他们的读写技能。

段落四（结尾段：总结）【作用积极】To sum up, the influences of the increasing use of computers and mobile phones are decided by how they are used. Over dependency on them could undermine the pupils’ academic literacy, while appropriate and smart utilisation could contribute to the development of related skills.

参考译文：总之，计算机和手机被日益使用的影响取决于它们的使用方式。过度依赖他们可能会损害学生的学术素养，而适当和明智的利用可能有助于相关技能的发展。

【语料积累】appropriate utilisation适当使用，utilise作动词表示利用，语域正式，表示因某个特定的目的使用

综上所述，范文的结构是：开头段（背景信息+他人观点+文章内容）+主体段一（消极影响=非正式语言+文本简单+自动纠错）+主体段二（积极影响=远程合作）+ 结尾段（合理使用，趋利避好），这也是问题类写作的作文结构。

最后，看你是否能更自信地头脑风暴，用上今日所学，试一试：电子产品对读写能力的影响（平时写作过程中，多用新积累的观点替换自己已有的观点，巩固吸收）

今天的讲解就到这里，希望能够启发你对读写能力受到电子产品影响的思考~